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I Don't Know Why You Scare Me...
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I don't know why you scare me
but I don't mind that you do
because every time you scare me
im stuck thinking of you
It could be your eyes
but they are filled with joy
or it could be your smile
but that I really enjoy
it could be the way you talk
but that always makes me grin
I don't know why you scare me
but I don't mind that you do
because every time you scare me
it brings me closer to the truth
It could be the way you walk
but I am tempted to stare
it could be the way you smell
but that is like candied air
It could be all of these
but I find with them no scare
I now know why you scare me
but I don't mind that you do
because every time you scare me
it makes me fall for you
but I don't mind that you do
because every time you scare me
im stuck thinking of you
It could be your eyes
but they are filled with joy
or it could be your smile
but that I really enjoy
it could be the way you talk
but that always makes me grin
I don't know why you scare me
but I don't mind that you do
because every time you scare me
it brings me closer to the truth
It could be the way you walk
but I am tempted to stare
it could be the way you smell
but that is like candied air
It could be all of these
but I find with them no scare
I now know why you scare me
but I don't mind that you do
because every time you scare me
it makes me fall for you
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you don't have to capitalize the beginnings of stanzas if you don't want to.
you use 'but' quite a lot--do you need to? can you get rid of a few buts and still have the same meaning? (I think you can).
stanza three, line three, typo on 'because'
inconsistent punctuation--you shorten 'don't' a few times, and get rid of the apostrophe a few others. pick a style, since it's a poem there's no right way, but being consistent is good.
stanza 2, line 4: you might mean 'but what i really enjoy'
this is a pretty good poem. you should submit it as a deviation! just do the same thing you do with art. poetry is a category. It makes me wonder if you really want to break up with her. But I guess there's no helping it, eh?
you use 'but' quite a lot--do you need to? can you get rid of a few buts and still have the same meaning? (I think you can).
stanza three, line three, typo on 'because'
inconsistent punctuation--you shorten 'don't' a few times, and get rid of the apostrophe a few others. pick a style, since it's a poem there's no right way, but being consistent is good.
stanza 2, line 4: you might mean 'but what i really enjoy'
this is a pretty good poem. you should submit it as a deviation! just do the same thing you do with art. poetry is a category. It makes me wonder if you really want to break up with her. But I guess there's no helping it, eh?